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I am nothing
an empty shell
a hollow carcass of brittle bones and rotting teeth
She is beautiful
bright patterns and rainboots
Her smile is true
and she love the world she lives in
He is a rebel
Never still and never truthful
He loves running across the street just as a car comes
it gives him such a high
She is quiet
timid
a book worm
She spends her time in dimly lit corners in rundown bookstores
hiding away from the world
She is imposive and violent
loves to fight
swear
Her emotions are stronger than the rest
taking her over in a matter of seconds
They are all me
but I am none of them
and I haven't seen them in many years
though I hear from them everyday
Their voices haunt me
echoing
screaming
their hands touch me in the dark
clawing to be freed
for they are why I am empty
they fill me and push away the person I truly long to be
The person that I need to be
in order to stay alive
an empty shell
a hollow carcass of brittle bones and rotting teeth
She is beautiful
bright patterns and rainboots
Her smile is true
and she love the world she lives in
He is a rebel
Never still and never truthful
He loves running across the street just as a car comes
it gives him such a high
She is quiet
timid
a book worm
She spends her time in dimly lit corners in rundown bookstores
hiding away from the world
She is imposive and violent
loves to fight
swear
Her emotions are stronger than the rest
taking her over in a matter of seconds
They are all me
but I am none of them
and I haven't seen them in many years
though I hear from them everyday
Their voices haunt me
echoing
screaming
their hands touch me in the dark
clawing to be freed
for they are why I am empty
they fill me and push away the person I truly long to be
The person that I need to be
in order to stay alive
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I'm really sorry guys, my brain is a bit f*cked up right now. I will probably end up taking this down.
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ImpactFirst off, this is my first critic so I may not have the best proffesional view, but I love this poem. PLEASE do NOT take this down. I loved your view on the girl and I can some what connect without as I have been writinga story that feautures a girl almost exactly like the one you have in your poem. I thought this was beautiful. Walter Wellesley "Red" Smith said "There's nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and open a vein," and this is exactly what you did here. I have a hard time feeling emotions and this actually touched me. Thank you.